in her

[Serenna]

her tears taste like
the sadness that he poured
into her heart
if she could only remember
the sweetness he once
made in her
just some innocent days ago

[machinery]

This has something. I think you could really engage yourself into this. Really put it all out on the table. Get your idea across..you know....make it strong.

[parch]

very touching...i like this. short but still all that was needed. sad. maybe too sad.
___---parch

[machinery]

back to this ....i don't know why I said that I wanted it to be stronger and more involved.....this is really in-depth..really straight forward in beauty...poetic and touching...sad and meaningful..this needs nothing...great work...

maybe you could write about it again? i really enjoyed this...as your work, where have you been?

[tsilo]

this is wonderful...really touching.am i learning now?